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CONTEST
There's a dragon in my head,
And he's watching me and smiling,
And for sure I do not like this,
For he's thinking of me dying,

There's a selkie just behind,
And she sets my belly roiling,
And although I block my ears,
Her laughter there's no foiling,

There are bane-sidhes in my dreams,
And I'm really getting nervous,
For we all know what they mean,
And they like to sing in chorus,

And the pixies skip round me,
Whenever I dare look away,
Poking, pinching, prodding, prodding,
With fingers sharp and fey,

I wondered how a dragon smiles,
With jaws so full of teeth,
But I can live without knowing,
Of the gullet that lies beneath...



Entries!

There's a harpy in my eyes
and she's uglier than sin
but she takes a pretty guise
and tempts me from within   
pegacorna2

The sounds of claws across the glass
Titter softly through my sleep
While dragons breath fogs up the night
As across the road it creeps.
MadMikkie

His teeth are so sharp,
his scales so defined.
While his breath stays hot,
his eyes stay kind.
Desopilar Random winner

A caterpillar stands out bold and clear
Against the moonlight gloom
While Dragon pauses, glances now
And tempts me to my doom
MadMikkie 1st place

A flower fairy showers me
with petals light as air
Distracting me while all her friends
tie elf-knots in my hair
Brigaurdylian772nd place

I wondered if a dragon cries,
of what sorrows he would speak,
his scaley mouth a sharp toothed frown,
tears like diamonds on his cheek.
Aseamlessbond3rd place

Sirens sing their subduing tune
Loudly into my head
I cannot escape their call
Nor can I escape the dread
Nickelpat

my head is now dizzy
my hands begin to shake.
the demons surround me,
there's tablets i need to take.
KNOTTBOLD

A mermaid floats serenely by
and offers me her hand,
I tremble at the knowledge
that she'll drown me if she can
Brigaurdylian77 Won popular choice

Links to illustration entries below.
Still and always accepting contributions :D
Full permission granted to participants (pending everyone involved's acceptance) to resubmit with all credit and links included (will note you the html if you want).

THE CONTEST News article: [link]


Random draw: =Desopilar

1st place ~MadMikkie
2nd place *Brigaurdylian77
3rd place*Aseamlessbond

...wow, one after the other :O_o:

Won by *Brigaurdylian77 proof: [link]

1st place picture ~elexti - In the Forest...



Write another verse of your own, or illustrate one of the existing verses (including your own :D ) by May 31st

the News Article

And we have our first rhyme entries.
=pegacorna2
=Desopilar
~MadMikkie
*Aseamlessbond
~KNOTTBOLD
~Nickelpat
*Brigaurdylian77


Picture Entries
*Aseamlessbond - Dragon Smiles
=Desopilar - Dragon Smiles Picture
~elexti - In the Forest...


Wrote this on Christmas Day when my internet was down... wrote about eight poems, plus scraps actually.

This one isn't great but it bounces.

(tip - bane-sidhe = banshee. I just want to spell it the older way, because it looks 'right' :D )

Crit is good; I think all the line syllables match, not sure about the actual beat in places though.

Hmmm... also, if I get four or more verses following on, I'll do a journal feature. Preferably from different people.
Yes. You heard me.
WRITE ME ANOTHER VERSE!
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:iconray72285:
ray72285 Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2010   Traditional Artist
Just sending you a congratulations for being featured in this month's issue of The Dragons of deviantART - [link] :)
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victortky Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2009
its an excellent one.
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elexti Featured By Owner May 31, 2009  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I... submitted on your journal entry instead because I'm an idiot and didn't read, but here it is again anyway. I did get it done before the deadline though, yay :)

[link]

Hope you like.
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Flynn-the-cat Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2009  Hobbyist Digital Artist
that's alright ^_^
thank you! sorry, I'm having computer issues. :stab: it doesn't the internet or... well, anything, and keeps freezing and crashing.
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elexti Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2009  Hobbyist Digital Artist
oh that sucks... :( I feel your pain. Cheers for getting back to me though.
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Brigaurdylian77 Featured By Owner May 29, 2009
ENTRY!
Just because everyone was using powerful and scary creatures I wanted to do the complete opposite. Flower fairies are always though of as tiny innocent beings. But they can be very mischevious!

A flower fairy showers me
with petals light as air
Distracting me while all her friends
tie elf-knots in my hair

and a darker one just for the hell of it:

A mermaid floats serenely by
and offers me her hand,
I tremble at the knowledge
that she'll drown me if she can
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Flynn-the-cat Featured By Owner May 29, 2009  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Hooray! i LIKE :D
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KNOTTBOLD Featured By Owner May 18, 2009   Photographer
my head is now dizzy
my hands begin to shake.
the demons surround me,
there's tablets i need to take.
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:iconflynn-the-cat:
Flynn-the-cat Featured By Owner May 18, 2009  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Added!
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Aseamlessbond Featured By Owner May 7, 2009
Thank You! I haven't written poems for years now I'm afraid, but glad You liked it! :D
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MadMikkie Featured By Owner May 1, 2009
my own is something like 23 verses long! But I hope this suffices. Sheesh - I even changed it before pressing send.





The sounds of claws across the glass
Titter softly through my sleep
While dragons breath fogs up the night
As across the road it creeps.

A caterpillar stands out bold and clear
Against the moonlight gloom
While Dragon pauses, glances now
And tempts me to my doom.
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Flynn-the-cat Featured By Owner May 2, 2009  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Added :D
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:iconflynn-the-cat:
Flynn-the-cat Featured By Owner May 2, 2009  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Hooray! Ooh, I like that.

23 verses! :rofl:

Bah. My internet hates me and won't let me load anything (including YOUR page). I'll add your entries later >.<
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pegacorna2 Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2009
Ooopy. Typo, the last line should read:
and tempts me from within
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:iconflynn-the-cat:
Flynn-the-cat Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2009  Hobbyist Digital Artist
If you insist :D I quite like the alternate.
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pegacorna2 Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2009
Whichever works, but I don't think that it is correct :O
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Flynn-the-cat Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2009  Hobbyist Digital Artist
It's sort of...

'a pretty guise as tempts me'
Probably should be 'such a pretty guise as tempts...'

'As' can be used similarly to like and that, although it may not be so common these days...

it is slightly less easily understandable, but more interesting than 'a pretty guise, and tempts me...' :D
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pegacorna2 Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2009
This is cool! I will try but I actually am not good at poetry, at least the sort where you rhyme and have all the right number of claps or beats or syllables....see...I don't even know what to call it. but here's a try...

There's a harpy in my eyes
and she's uglier than sin
but she takes a pretty guise
as tempts me from within
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Flynn-the-cat Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2009  Hobbyist Digital Artist
:icongwomp:
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la-fee-de-morte Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
I really like this, especially the imagery!
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SympHoniK Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2009
Ooh, I just love the surrealism. Fave'd.
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:iconflynn-the-cat:
Flynn-the-cat Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2009  Hobbyist Digital Artist
:iconoaml: thank you!
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adverbial-spectra Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2009  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Nice work with the metre! The syllables in the last line don't quite fit the rhythm of the rest of the poem though, maybe rearranging it a bit could give a stronger finish. Also, since "roiling" and "foiling" are uncommon words that one rhyme feels more forced than the rest. Good job!
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Flynn-the-cat Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2009  Hobbyist Digital Artist
aaah ha! it's not the last line, it's the second to last. And the last line in the one before.

Thank you! I knew that ending was off. Now I know where and how I can rework it a bit more.

I'm afraid I don't find roil and foil uncommon >.> but then, it's out of my head :D I know what you mean though, I do try and avoid the forced rhythms where I can.
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Desopilar Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2009  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
That's cute. I like it. I want to do another verse, but i'm no good at poetry. XD
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Flynn-the-cat Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2009  Hobbyist Digital Artist
PRACTICE.

I WANT YOUR VERSES.

(and thanks ^_^)
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Desopilar Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2009  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
XD :iconninjaglompplz:
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:iconflynn-the-cat:
Flynn-the-cat Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2009  Hobbyist Digital Artist
:iconoaml:
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:icondesopilar:
Desopilar Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2009  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
XD Took me forever to understand what that was! XD
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Flynn-the-cat Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2009  Hobbyist Digital Artist
:iconroyalfacepalmplz: :iconfacepalmplz: :icondoublefacepalmplz: :icontriplefacepalmplz: :iconquadfacepalmplz: :icondodecafacepalmplz: :icongoogolfacepalmplz:
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Desopilar Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2009  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
. . .XDXD
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Flynn-the-cat Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2009  Hobbyist Digital Artist
:bow:
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KarrinGray Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2009
Very fun, it put a smile on my face. :)
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:iconflynn-the-cat:
Flynn-the-cat Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2009  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Glad to hear it ^_^


...wait. You're a dragon?
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:iconkarringray:
KarrinGray Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2009
Right now, yes. Yes, I am... :evillaugh:
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:iconflynn-the-cat:
Flynn-the-cat Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2009  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Interesting.

I needed more dragon's blood... stay where you are please? :innocent:
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KarrinGray Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2009
rawr. ;p
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jodipheonix Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2009   General Artist
well written :clap:

I like the images it puts in my mind :)
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Scarletkid Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2009
defiantly bouncy ^_^
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Himmapaan Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2009  Professional Traditional Artist
Hehe, excellent. :D

(I have personal reservations about half-rhymes, but they are merely that. ^^; ) *Hides*
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AmberCrystalElf Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2009  Professional Digital Artist
I love it! ...it's magickal :D
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